Unit 3: Teen stress and pressure - Listening

Chào em, ad nhận xét bài viết của em còn chưa tốt, chưa giải quyết được yêu cầu đề bài, còn sai nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản, thiếu sự liên kết giữa các câu các ý. Đối với bài này, mở đầu êm cần đưa ra nhận định rằng em đồng ý hay không với ý kiến trên và các câu sau sẽ là lí do tại sao. Những luận điểm em đưa ra thiếu liên kết với ý kiến của bài. Em có tham khảo bài viết mẫu sau để luyện tập lại nhé. Bài này hơi dài nhưng sẽ giúp em có thêm ý để viết. Chúc em học tốt.\

Some people believe that treatment is more important than the prevention. However, in my opinion, I think prevention is better than cure and government should allocate funds accordingly. In this essay, I will propose possible illustrations for the same.
To begin with, government should provide an appropriate budget to have cleanliness. It is a know for a fact that untidy or unsanitary places are the cause health issues and diseases often originate from such places. For example, people living in slum often possess various kinds of medical conditions. Due to lack of infrastructure and manpower authorities are unable to maintain the hygienic conditions for the citizens.
Secondly, government should invest in research. It will help to counter serious and newborn diseases which will prevent health problems and also, as treatment of patients is very costly and sometimes they cost a fortune even in government hospitals. For example, in corona pandemic, many countries failed miserably due to lack of research in medical area and the treatment was unmanageable. Studies in the medical field will definitely boost the country's economy.
To conclude, it is necessary to prevent illness, so, government should focus on the sanitary conditions and medical research. further, it will act as security shield against diseases and it will be a lot easier to overcome diseases as there would less number of patients. So, I strongly agree that prevention is better than treatment