Unit 3: Teen stress and pressure - Writing (Extra Exercises) (p.2)

Chào em, bài viết của em không tốt, lạc đề. Đề yêu cầu viết về vấn đề của học sinh thì em cần viết về đối tượng là học sinh nói chung, và nội dung có thể là về nguyên nhân và giải pháp để bớt áp lực. Trong quá trình viết thì em có thể thêm trải nghiệm cá nhân nhưng việc này cực kì hạn chế. 1 bài nghị luận xã hội thì không ai viết về cá nhân nhé em. Em tham khảo bài mẫu dưới đây và viết lại, rồi gửi lên đây để các ad sửa chữa và góp ý nhé.
Academic pressure is a problem attracting the attention of society. So, what is the cause of this phenomenon? What impact does it have on our lives? In my opinion, the pressure to study comes from the mentality of most Vietnamese people attaching importance to degrees. Since then, a part of parents as well as schools, because they want their children and students to get high scores, set too many requirements, causing pressure on students. This phenomenon has many negative consequences. First of all, it deprives children of the opportunity to play and participate in physical activities when they have to spend too much time studying. At the same time, when children do not meet expectations and are scolded and blamed by adults, children are easily born with low self-esteem, depression and even depression. In fact, not long ago, public opinion was stirred up by the incident of a female student who committed suicide after being scolded by her parents for poor grades. In the face of this phenomenon, we all need to be aware of the pressure to study, so that we can behave in accordance with ourselves as well as the learning of those around us. The role of learning is undeniable. But we also need to balance learning as well as play to get the best results.

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Chào em, em tham khảo bài chữa nhé:
Dear Miss Sweetie
I am a student in a secondary school and I am in grade 9. This year I am also a senior so the high school exam is coming very close and I’m so CONFUSED about choosing A school TO GO INTO, it makes me TOSS AND TURN IN BED ALL NIGHT thinking AND THINKING/ CONTEMPLATING. BECAUSE OF THAT, I CAN NOT FOCUS ON MY STUDYING. THE REASON WHY IT TAKES ME SO LONG TO MAKE THE FINAL DECISION IS THAT I do not know what I like and which school is suitable for me. If you were me, what would you do? Could you give me some advice? Thank you a lot!

Chào em,
Em tham khảo nha:
1. Confusion
2. Annoying.